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English is my second language. I need someone who enlgish is first language. please check my essay and correct it. I know this essay is look pretty bad but i don have enough time..... After I graduated high school, I decided to go University of Washington to achieve my goal. I applied architecture school. I always dream about being an architect since I was kid. I loved to draw and design something. I did not know why but it makes me clear that I really happy and it makes me smile. I was very into it and enjoy about it when I work on something that I really like. Whether you like it or not, I think most important fact is “Are you enjoy what you are doing now?” I love this quote “A genius can’t win one who does his best, a person who tried his best can’t win t he one who enjoys what he does.” My college life wasn’t good straight line. I lost somewhere and I did not focus on what I should do in school. I realized I lost my interest at architecture. Also, it was hard for me as well. I figured architecture wasn’t what I dreamed about. It wasn’t right picture for me. Subjects and materials of architecture that I learned from classes was not what I expected that I dreamed about. After I lost my appetite, I was totally out of control. I should study but I started to do something else other than what I supposed to do. I spent lots of time on playing computer games and hanging out with friends and drinks. Yeah, I was enjoying of college life but in wrong way. I wasted time and I lost my chances. This is really I regret about what I done in college. I did not use time wisely. Of course, my grade became low and low to hit the bottom. I couldn’t graduate from that school. I work at the architecture firm as CAD operator now. I have been working here almost 2 years now on. Before this job, I worked but I had something in my mind that this is not what I wanted for. Since I kept thinking about dissatisfaction of my job, I felt that I work for nothing. I had a chance to work at architecture firm that I really wanted to work. Its small company but I could learn much stuff that I desire long time ago. My new career changes my life. I changed more energetic person than before. I started to enjoy it and it makes me smile. When I work on this filed, I figure out that this is what I really want to do in future. That is including interior design as well. I always said that in my mind “Wow, this is really fun.” But I felt that I am lack of special knowledge for this job field. I felt that I need to be more educated before it’s too late. I think education is very important. I want to be an interior designer. I hope AI will help me out to achieve my goal. I was very slacker in previous college. It means I could be lost in school once again. However, I really regret what I done in previous college life. I was young and I did not know what to do at that time. But I learned something from my mistake. I set my ultimate goal now. I would more concentrate and focus on interior design classes for sure. This is what I desire for long long time ago and definitely I will really enjoy it. This is my last minute chance. I did one step back last time but this is chance to two steps forward.

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1. Okay, finished editing. I was in architecture also. Recently, I switched to Visual Communications Design which is in the same department here as Interior Design. We have similar stories. It's pretty clear that English is a second language for you, but that shouldn't stop you from getting accepted. Great essay! After I graduated high school, I decided to go the University of Washington to realize my goal of studying architecture. I had always dreamed of being an architect since a young age. I loved to draw and design. I did not know why, but I could not resist the allure of the arts. This type of work made me genuinely happy, and whenever I had the opportunity to be a part of a design process, I enjoyed my involvement. I found that the most important thing one can do is enjoy their work. I was accepted to study architecture at the University of Washington, but not everything went according to plan. I went adrift, and did not focus on what I should do in school. I realized that I had lost my heartfelt interest in architecture. It was challenging and became a burden for me. I decided that I was out of place in this old dream. The things I learned from architecture classes were not what I expected, and this was not how I envisioned architecture in the first place. After I lost my lifelong desire for architecture, I was completely out of control. I rarely studied, and I spent lots of time playing computer games, hanging out with friends and drinking. Yeah, I was enjoying of college life but in all the wrong ways. I wasted time and I lost my chances. This is what I regret most about my time in college. I did not realize how valuable my time there was until my grades hit the bottom, and I could no longer graduate from that school. Now, I work at a small architecture firm as CAD operator. I have been working there for almost two years. This job made me feel grateful for a new outlook on architecture. Previous jobs left me unhappy and wanting. Since I placed so much value on doing what I enjoy, I felt that I worked for nothing. When I received a chance to work at an architecture firm, I really appreciated the opportunity. I could once again learn the things I desired to long ago. My new career has changed my life. The hopelessness is gone; I am a more energetic person than before. I have started to enjoy my dream once again, and it makes me smile. When I work in this field, I am certain this is what I want to do with my future. Because of my experiences at the firm, my new dream is more centered on interior design. I find that I enjoy this most. However, I feel that I am lacking in special knowledge for this job field. I feel a need to become more educated before it is too late. This education is necessary. I want to be an interior designer. I strongly believe that AI is the best option for me to achieve my goal. I recognize my previous lack of effort in education. I understand this means I could become lost in school once again. However, I deeply regret my actions in my last college life. I was young and did not know what to do at that time. I have learned a great many things from my mistakes, and I have set an ultimate goal. I will concentrate on schoolwork and focus strongly on my interior design classes. This is what I have desired from a long, long time ago and I will not hesitate to enjoy it. This is my very last chance. I have taken one step back; this is my chance to take two forward.