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(Re-posted) Is this personal statement okay..? please read.?
My first memory of enjoying art and design was from a young age, as I had won an art box set for Best Sketchbook, in year 2003. Also achieving first place in a Rangoli competition, I feel my drawing and designing skills have grown from this. I have always been interested in making and creating new things by using scrap materials, different mediums, textures and colours. Over the years, I have become more independent with my work and thoughts, which I gained throughout my A-levels. I have wanted to pursue a career in interior architecture for a while now and am eager to express and explore it through university. The possible chance to shape, life style and surroundings, is incredible. Interior architect being a unique subject; it fascinated me that the environment we live in is enjoyed by people on an everyday-basis. I recently took on some voluntary work experience, which amongst other features involved an element of interior work. This encouraged me to be creative and do first-hand decision making for layouts, themes and furnishings, and being responsive to their needs. Currently doing a foundation diploma, I have gained more independence with my work and ideas, as well as broadening my mind about the use of materials by being more experimental. Slowly beginning to push the creativity side of me, it has expanded the way my mind works and thinks, in terms of analysing and reflecting on my own creations. Interior architecture is not only having a skill but also a combination of creativity and imagination, which I think many designers have such as Rachel Ashwell that I aspire to be like. Whilst being in America this summer, I had come across Mint Museum of Art situated in Charlotte, North Carolina. It was filled with a range of art from ancient, contemporary to decorative textile and sculptures. The artwork was from broad variety of cultures, and I personally had enjoyed the insights of ethnicity, which was portrayed through the work. Recently visiting an exhibition at the Royal Academy of Arts, I found the sketches and insight of architectural work done by Sir Nickolas Grimshaw, very interesting. I admire the thought process and amount of detail included in his developments, which for me shows the connection between problem solving and originality. Also visiting Anish Kapoor’s gallery in London, I was amazed at the artwork, because it was so neat and expressive. I find when observing the sculptures, it makes the mind work in a different way due to it being surreal and attractive. I want to study interior architecture because, I am intrigued by the opportunity to explore and learn, which can allow me to be expressive and development my strengths. I feel enthusiastic about designing and making, so being a hardworking person, I am open to challenges. I believe overcoming challenges can only further improve minds, and increase the ability to expand our thinking. Therefore I am eager about the prospect of working with others, to see how their interpretations and aspirations vary from my own; as well as gain an insight and inspiration from contrasting works.
Public Comments
- cool i guess
- seems fine to me pal !
- could remove last paragraph
- don't put 'year 2003' - sounds slightly awkward. Just put '2003' "The possible chance to shape, life style and surroundings, is incredible" - this doesn't make sense! what do you mean? nor does this: (your use of the semicolon makes no sense) "Interior architect being a unique subject; it fascinated me..." try something like - I feel that interior architect is a particularly unique subject, and it fascinates me that... -why do you think it's a unique subject though? You need to explain why! "Whilst being in America this summer, I had come across Mint Museum..." - makes more sense if you say 'i came across', rather than 'i had come across' "range of art from ancient, contemporary to decorative textile and sculptures" - this doesn't make sense. Say this instead: 'from ancient and contemporary to decorative textiles...' "The artwork was from broad variety of cultures" - you have to say 'from broad varieties of culture' OR 'from a broad variety of cultures'. you should write: 'I personally enjoyed the insights I received into ethnicity' - rather than 'i personally had enjoyed etc.' this makes more sense: I found the sketches and the insight into the architectural work done by.... in the last paragraph you don't need a comma after because. in the second line it should be 'and develop my strengths' rather than 'development'. in the last line it should be 'as well as gaining an insight and inspiration from...' you've covered a lot of material which is good - but the way you express yourself needs a lot of work! A lot of your sentences don't make sense, and I have highlighted above some of the moments where you haven't made sense, but try and get someone to read over it for you (like a teacher). Reading it out loud will also help you to realize the mistakes. Also, you don't understand how to use the word 'insight' - it is always an insight 'into' something else, not an insight 'of'! Hope this helps.
