Home Architecture Talk

What do you think? Does it capture your interest?

This is the beginning of a little piece I wrote. Constructive criticism would be appreciated. The neighborhood is of blended architecture, a smattering of flavors: elegant Tudors, magnificent Georgians, charming Cape Cods, and contemporary brick and mortar homes. Mature trees adorn the parkway, prime specimens in the peak of their lives. Landscaping is prim and proper, and each home comes with a complimentary canine. There is Ozzie, my canine companion, Bernie, Sophie, Muddy, Snoopy, and Candi, among others. This is Ponca Drive, a seemingly picturesque community. I moved to Ponca Drive with high hopes, an expanding family, and abounding horizons. I left Ponca Drive broken-hearted, my future was uncertain, my family disintegrated, and my notion of the family forever changed.

Public Comments

1. It's interesting but I think it gives away too much of where your story is going. Be a little more subtle in prefacing the experiences that are to come.
2. I want to know more!! What happened? I did picture the neighborhood in Desperate Housewives tho :) The only thing I didn't like was the word smattering. It just sounds messy and that doesn't fit your story. How about smooth blend of flavors?